AN hi guiex dis is my first story writn its about twilight andmy name is Tamara oh and mi twin sister Amy halped mi write dis Amy thx for da halp!
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CHAPTAR ONE: NEW VAMPIRE IN TOWN!!!!
Hi everyone, my name is Aurora Lovelace Starlight Lolita Borealis. I have pretty raven black and shiny hair that goes to my waist and shiny topaz-colored eyes. I have a D-cup bra size and I love wearing Gothic Lolita. My favorite band is Evanescence and Amy Lee is my idol! Anyway, I had to move to Forks, a quiet little town that is so boring! Anyway I LOVE SATAN FOREVER EVEN THOUGH I WEAR CROSSES WITH MY GOTHIC LOLITA DRESSES!!!!!!!! Anyway, when I woke up in my bed (we don't have coffins), I saw that Luna Tropo Strato Meso Thermo Iono Exo Atmo Eclipse (AN: Amy dis is u!!1) was already awake and drinking a glass of bright maroon blood, her favorite drink. Mine, too!
"Hi, Aurora." Said Luna.
"Hi." I replied, grinning.
"Ready for our first day of school?"
"YES!" I giggled and raced out the door.
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AN: Iss it gud? i don't rite gud so amy is mi beta thx gurl!!1

















Try not to describe your character so much in the first chapter. You're pretty good with description, but try not to depend on it to tell your whole story. Let your character build up throughout the story. It'll work out better.
I recommend reading different books. It's a good way to learn word-play and description.
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I see yet another my immortal wannabe
let me know if you decide to go to school someday. god forbid if you get any worse at writing.